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Me not knowing you write novels too 😭 You are literally amazing, sister! 👏

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Thank you Merissa💛 I wasn’t “amazing” at your age🥲Wish. I knew Jesus that early. You’re super blessed!

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Girl you met Jesus just at the right time 😉❤️ and now you shine so bright because of it! God has blessed us both so beautifully 🙏 happy to have "met" you on here, sis!

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Me too💛Maybe we'll meet one day in person😉

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Yes! 💯🙌

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The images behind your words are powerful--I feel like I'm actually in the forest with Ivan, like I'm actually Ivan. If you hone your focus on details, invest yourself in slowing down and elaborately describing sensations, you will give your reader texture and sensation.

When you go outside, hone your senses to God's presence in creation around you, the same God who intricately forms everything in minute detail, who considers sparrows. Try to "give birth" to words that describe what you see, feel, hear, taste, like you are Adam naming the creatures. Let His world come alive to you through words, and your writing will be even more powerfully resonant to your reader.

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Interesting, 🤔 I like the synopsis here. Is it presented in its entirety? Or is it cut down as a sample as a preview?

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Well! Have I found a LotR fan here? *ahem. Master Mellon?*

Some advice:

foul language is a turn-off to many, including me!

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Very nice tools to remembering my childhood. Thanks

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“everything can become its very opposite under certain circumstances."

Can the elixir become the poison and what is the synthesis of change?

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